The Rhetoric of Reputation

"He is dressed in a casual black shirt and he is smiling, which lets readers find him more appealing and might let them trust him more."

Problem: Second half of the sentence is awkward and has poor word choice.

Correction: "He is dressed in a casual black shirt and he is smiling. This enables the blogger to seem more personable."

"The first is letting the reader be able to leave comments on his blog posts."

Problem: Poor word choice of the verbs

Correction: "The first is enabling the reader to leave comments on his blog posts."

"While one's representation of self is not always the most reliable, due to a general bias toward oneself, if a profusion of information is provided there is reduced ambiguity, which can result in greater trust of the source."

Problem: This sentence had a lot of passive voice and wasn't very strong because of that.

Correction: "If the sole source of information about Michael Masnick were Masnick himself, the information would not be very reliable dut to the general bias he would have toward portraying himself in a positive manner. If, however, Masnick and Techdirt provided a profusion of information, ambiguity would be reduced, and readers would be able to place greater trust in the source."

Brittany Watson
Lacey Krantez
Ruben Rangel